My trip to the sky tower.
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The Sky Tower
As me and my mum walked through the entrance of the sky tower , a lady asked us if we had reservation, We did so she gave us a piece of paper which let us through to the elevator.
The elevator took around one minute to take us all the way to the top.
The elevator had a glass floor so you could see all the way down from where you started. It also had a glass wall so you could see the outside while you were going up.
We finally made it to the top we got to look all the way down it seemed so far away.
Everything looked like ants. We looked around and took some pictures of how high it was. There weren't a lot of people there. After that it was time for lunch.
We got back onto the elevator and went down to the food room. We were given some menus and word finds and someone showed us to our table. They came back in around five minutes and asked if we were ready to order I got the fish and fries,and my mum got some steak i think.
After we ordered my mum accidentally put her purse on the side and as we slowly went around the purse got left behind some nice people found it and gave it back to us, but then my mum put it on the side again and then they picked it up again and started laughing and held it up it was pretty funny! She nearly did it again but i saw it first!
After a while our meal came my mum loved hers , and I loved mine. They were delicious it didn’t take long for us to finish our lunch. Around five minute later someone came up to us and asked if we wanted dessert. So my mum ordered some cheese cake, and i ordered a banana split ice cream. We both loved our dessert. The icecream, was melting down my plate.
It soon was time to leave. My mum and I walked to the place we had to pay. While my mum was paying I took some free mints. My mum said I took too much but they were free plus someone said to take as mANY as I want. So we went down the lift and to the parking lot and found my mum’s friend and her kids waiting.
Wednesday, 20 June 2018
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Love the writing Frankie and it was most definitely interesting:)
ReplyDeleteHi koby
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Thank you for sharing this writing Frankie. I loved how you described how high the Sky tower is. It was funny how you described the people as ants.
ReplyDeleteWere you scared being so high in a glass elevator?
Kia ora, I am Aleasha from Matawai School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked I love your writing it is interesting.
I learnt that I learn that the elevator had a glass floor so you could see all the way down from where you started
Maybe you could you can tell us were the sky tower is.
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Aleasha
I really like how you used great words, i bet it looked real cool and a little bit scary.Where was the sky tower?Your mum must be a little bit forgetful about perse.
ReplyDeleteHi Frankie
ReplyDeleteI am Quinn from Matawai School.
I have been up the sky tower myself, I was there with my Auntie and when I stood on the glass windows that look straight down to the footpath she made me hold her hand. Did you stand on the glass panels?